A Publication of Samantha Mudd's Spring English 308J Class.
Thursday, April 28, 2011
Visual Analysis Thesis Statement
In this representation of the destruction of The Berlin Wall, I believe a transformation from a life of oppression and communism to one of a free individual is caught in one of the rawest forms possible.
Great start Ryan. Get more even specific. Include the photographer's name and specific elements that you think contribute to the "raw" feeling. You'll have to restructure the sentence a little, but it will take this from a good thesis to an excellent one.
In this representation of the destruction of The Berlin Wall, I believe a transformation from a life of oppression and communism to one of a free individual is caught in one of the rawest forms possible.
Great start Ryan. Get more even specific. Include the photographer's name and specific elements that you think contribute to the "raw" feeling. You'll have to restructure the sentence a little, but it will take this from a good thesis to an excellent one.
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